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Fixed Typos and grammar

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  1. Lennian

    Lennian Dark Lord of Team Amorous Team Amorous

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    Errors as they appear from start to finish in Skye's dateline.

    Store---
    Stage:30
    Path: 109>110>111>111
    Current: 111
    Jacqueline Knight: "Why are youin Foxy?"

    Stage:30
    Path: 122>122>123>123
    Current: 123
    Jacqueline Knight: "He wasn't thatbig"

    Stage:30
    Path: 147>147>148>148
    Current: 148
    Lunar: "shes probably a carrier." (She's*)
    (Also, Lunar's character doesn't disappear from the scene)

    Stage:30
    Path: 152>152>153>153
    Current: 153
    Skye: "What the fuckis your problem?"

    Stage: 30
    Path: 160>161>162>162
    Current: 162
    Skye: "I god I'm so stupid"

    Convention---

    Stage: 40
    Path: 32>33>35>35
    Current: 35
    Lexy: "She even shared her fur completely smooth" (Shaved*)

    Stage: 40
    Path: 77>78>81>81
    Current: 81
    Skye: "Your a great guy"

    Stage: 40
    Path: 91>91>92>92
    Current: 92
    Skye: "Oh shoot your right!"

    Stage: 40
    Path: 92>92>93>93
    Current: 93
    Hane: "Does he know your not allowed in the photo room unless your in costume right?" (You're*2) (Costume, right?*)
    Or could be changed to "He knows you're not allowed in the photo room unless you're in costume, right?"

    Stage: 40
    Path: 93>94>94>95
    Current: 95
    Player: "Oh, your going now?" (You're*)

    Skye's Home---

    Stage: 55
    Path: 61>62>63>63
    Current: 63
    Skye: "Haha your funny!"

    Stage: 55
    Path: 63>64>65>65
    Current: 65
    Skye: "Crap your right!"

    Not sure if those last two would benefit from the use of a comma, but I feel they may.
     
    Last edited: Nov 20, 2016
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