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  1. FurMaster DJ

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    hmm two things. 1 is this the Zoe that has a black tongue and red and black fur? 2. Great little intro there! I am not a fan of the format. A line then another line, but other than that it is really good leaves much to the imagination to think of the possibltys if that was what you were going for you nailed it, ja!
     
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    I see red and black in chapter two so I am guessing it is the same Zoe, ja? Ha ha ha that's sounds like my mother, "she is cute". So relatable! Very interesting, I like the angle the events leading toward more 'love'. I am using this term loosely. I really like this story. as I said the only thing I didn't like was the formatting of the writing I think its called poem style.
     
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    And for my chapter three review and remember you don't have to heed my advice. I liked how you change the formatting for chapter 3. Great work on the details. The only other thing that would confuse some people is the lack of " " in the writing other than that perfect job! I would like more chapters and different Storys. I didn't read much into the other because the order wasn't clear for all of them. I really like your work.
     
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    I posted one of my fursona stories in the unrelated discussion forum titled "A Memory of Snow" see if you can find anything wrong and if you do tell me plz.
     
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    first off thank you so much for the feed back I am pretty new to this and second off the format in the beginning was done like that because it would show I know how to write in a more rpg based game like amorous. That's how I soul write it and then convert it into a game. I haven't had much time to write more and id love to and ill post any thing new here.
     
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    Ps shhhhhh yes its the same Zoe >w< and the order for the other three is the date and then the date part two and a new beginning is its own story >w<
     
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    You lie! You can't be new to this its too good!
     
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    wow man, if my art career goes anywhere (which it won't) I could use you help for ideas if you want to of course. You really good at writing. Thanks for sharing your stories they inspire me to do my own.
     
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    I'd be glad to help you out. I'm still writing and won't stop till its done. Lol I should have more chapters coming out in a more regular basis now. And if you know any body he would like to read these please tell them about this I want more people to read this and see what they think
     
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    I don't trust any one to give the correct feedback you desrve but I might know of a few would I will suggest to read this
     
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